[E–pub New] (Cloaked in Shadow (The Dragori, #1)) by Benjamin Alderson


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    READ Cloaked in Shadow (The Dragori, #1) [E–pub New] (Cloaked in Shadow (The Dragori, #1)) by Benjamin Alderson MY BOOK IS OUT IN THE WORLDIM CRYINGThank you to everyone who has supported me and I hope you enjoy my book It is out now and I am literally crying into my Iced Latte Thank you all so so so so so so so much IM CRYING again ALL DAY This story means the world to me and I hope a young boy will read this one day and see how normal being gay is I AM WRITING A BOOKTHIS IS MY BABYI am so so excited about this announcement I

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    READ Cloaked in Shadow (The Dragori, #1) Benjamin Alderson Ó 1 SUMMARY [E–pub New] (Cloaked in Shadow (The Dragori, #1)) by Benjamin Alderson Disclamer Ben is a good friend of mine but let me tell you this book is OUT OF THIS WORLD I knew Ben was a good storyteller before he ever wrote Cloaked in Shadow but WOW did this book blow my mind It was as if I completely forgot my best friend was writing this book The story took over my mind and every twist and turn that this book bestowed upon me shook me to the core Plus gay elves?? WE NEED MORE OF THAT

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    REVIEW Ì 54GRANGE.CO.UK Ó Benjamin Alderson [E–pub New] (Cloaked in Shadow (The Dragori, #1)) by Benjamin Alderson BLATANT SEXISM The female characters are portrayed horribly Saw this book in the Goodreads newsletter and noticed the impressive ratings and I LOVE LGBT fiction But please do NOT believe the hype This story is sexist in the worst way delegating most of its female characters to one dimensional 'bitchy bimbo' st

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    READ Cloaked in Shadow (The Dragori, #1) REVIEW Ì 54GRANGE.CO.UK Ó Benjamin Alderson Benjamin Alderson Ó 1 SUMMARY uoting Ben's not official description Beauty and the Beast inspired fantasy with Dragons Gay Romance and Elemental ControlShut up and take my moneyI'm so sold I need this

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    [E–pub New] (Cloaked in Shadow (The Dragori, #1)) by Benjamin Alderson An Elf nicknamed Zac That's enough to DNR for me right there Let's break down the synopsis now the author puts f

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    [E–pub New] (Cloaked in Shadow (The Dragori, #1)) by Benjamin Alderson this was nice but underwhelming it just felt like every other YA fantasy i've ever read including the romance the fact that it was an mm romance was great because we don't see that enough in YA especially fantasy but even so it was just all stereotypical

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    [E–pub New] (Cloaked in Shadow (The Dragori, #1)) by Benjamin Alderson Cloaked in Shadow made me think of Throne of Glass and ACOTAR and a lot of set up books that put things in place before the shit hits the fan It felt like setting up a chessboard which makes me so much curious ab

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    Benjamin Alderson Ó 1 SUMMARY [E–pub New] (Cloaked in Shadow (The Dragori, #1)) by Benjamin Alderson Elves shifters and elemental magic oh my Ben's debut gives fans of the Shannara Chronicles something new to fangirl and boy D over in young adult fantasyOkay so I have to say First Year fans will love this one I se

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    READ Cloaked in Shadow (The Dragori, #1) REVIEW Ì 54GRANGE.CO.UK Ó Benjamin Alderson Benjamin Alderson Ó 1 SUMMARY A few disclaimers before I get into what is probably going to be a very lengthy and spoiler filled reviewOne of the main things I think is important in a book review or in any review is honesty So I’m going to be honest I was a little bit sceptical when I started reading this book The main thing that led to my scepticism was the amount of time that appeared to pass between the book being finished and its publication Rome wasn

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    [E–pub New] (Cloaked in Shadow (The Dragori, #1)) by Benjamin Alderson tbh I came for the gay but stayed for the storyThis was everything The whole time it felt like I was reading an ancient storybook because of the wonderful atmosphere and the breathtaking landscape BEAUTIFUL No wonder it is

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True Crime Addict hBLATANT SEXISM The female characters are portrayedorribly Saw this book in the Goodreads newsletter and noticed the impressive ratings and I LOVE LGBT fiction But please do NOT believe the Business Networks in Syria hype This story is sexist in the worst way delegating most of its female characters to one dimensional bitchy bimbo stereotypes while the eually one dimensional male cast of Mary Sues receive the rest of the fantasy tropes This is NOT acceptable in 2017 Here s just one early example and there are many many For context Zacriah is sitting in a wagon listening to girls gossip aboutaving sex with the prince I wonder what Our Mathematical Universe: My Quest for the Ultimate Nature of Reality he ll be wearing tonight Illera fiddled wither deep chestnut braid twisting it around Sheltie at the Funfair her finger Something tight Iope Alerior chuckled nudging Illera s shoulder with Problems and Solutions for Undergraduate Analysis Undergraduate Texts in Mathematics her own You re terrible truly For as long as I could remember Alerior and Katillad followed Illera around like doe eyed puppies always feeding Les Celtes aux racines de l'Europe : Actes du colloque tenu au Parlement de la Communaut franaise de Belgique et au Muse royal de Mariemont les 20 et 21 octobre 2006 her with just what she wanted toear I knew steering clear of Beyond Buds: Marijuana Extracts—Hash, Vaping, Dabbing, Edibles and Medicines her was the best option I d gaineder unwanted attention before and became the brunt of er boredom It didn t end well I felt almost sorry for whoever it was they gossiped about I can t wait to see is face when e sees what you re wearing later or what you are not wearing Katill also ad a filthy mind it was Nuclear Power: A Very Short Introduction her one redeeming uality Illera s laugh was shrill forced We ll see Iad to sneak my dress past father He would drop down dead if Nymph Fly Tying Techniues he saw what I d done to it She motioned wither two fingers Snip snip snip My laugh even surprised me The snort burst out of my nose which I tried to cover up with a cough It didn t work I turned away looking back over the side of the wagon but their conversation ad ceased I didn t ave to see to know Illera was looking at me Les derniers jours : La fin de l'empire romain d'Occident her gaze burned into the back of myead Something funny Her voice was sweet though I could taste the sickly undertone as she uestioned me I looked to Illera s violet eyes full of intrigue Her sharp brows pinched above Loveland her sinister smile Here we go I shook myead and Little Tree helder gaze biting my tongue Don t fall for it Don t fall for it No Her cackle pierced my ears Well let me see you must Aliran Politik Dan Aidah Dalam Islam have been daydreaming about your father who will no doubt fail miserably at theunt this evening she drawled My canines bit into my bottom lip and my mouth filled with salvia and copper Oh I know I know She jumped in Guide de l'employeur culturel her seat raisinger Der Heimliche Fürstensohn hand in the air By this point the entire cart was listening watching Was it the thought of your motheraving to beg yet again for food Yes that must be it Because that is Science and Democracy hilarious She threwer Strength Training for Basketball (Strength Training for Sport) head back and roared with laughter If that was not enough of a kick to the balls she clencheder fists pretending to rub fake tears from Megalodon: Fact or Fiction? her eyesNyah is partially the exception and maybe this gets better later in the book but I can t stomach another page and first impressions matterAs if the misogyny wasn t enough to rate it one star let s take a look at the writing itself Purple prose grammar errors very weird metaphors on every page especially when magic is being used modern words constantly peppered throughout that break any sense this is supposed to be a fantasy world It feels like a series of roleplaying posts or a fanfic Also there s a complete absence of anything resembling story or compelling character motivation An example the first two chapters the main character is just sitting in a cart Literately He s just a camera describing everything in purple prose every irrelevant detail thatad nothing to do with (Becoming Orgasmic: A Sexual and Personal Growth Programme for Women) By Julia R. Heiman (Author) Paperback on (Dec , 2008) his lack of motivation or personal conflict The plot instead seems like a lot of absurdly random coincidences the characters stumble upon rather than driving things through their own actions DNF and will NOT come back for the seuel this was nice but underwhelming it just felt like every other YA fantasy i ve ever read including the romance the fact that it was an mm romance was great because we don t see that enough in YA especially fantasy but even so it was just all stereotypical A few disclaimers before I get into what is probably going to be a very lengthy and spoiler filled reviewOne of the main things I think is important in a book review or in any review isonesty So I m going to be onest I was a little bit sceptical when I started reading this book The main thing that led to my scepticism was the amount of time that appeared to pass between the book being finished and its publication Rome wasn t built in a day and neither are good books The edition of Cloaked in Shadow I own is the Kindle edition It s possible that some of the things I m talking about are different in the print edition That doesn t make some I m talking about are different in the print edition That doesn t make some the stuff I m going to talk about fine Every edition of a book you put out should be as perfect as possible I am in no way trying to trash this book Writing and publishing a book is a tremendous achievement There are some people out there who seem to love this "BOOK WHICH IS GREAT IT JUST "which is great It just t for me What I m oping to give John Ormond, Emyr Humphreys, John Tripp (Penguin Modern Poets, here is constructive criticism As a writer myself I find criticism one of the best ways I gain experience and improve as a writer I m going to include uotes to back up some of the stuff I m saying just so anyone reading this can see exactly what I m referring to Another point I want to make is that I wrote this in the midst of writing my thesis proposal so I mayave been a little cranky at the time I ve tried to look over this review a number of times to make sure my cranky thesis brain wasn t clouding my judgement These are my own opinions If you loved the book then great Nothing is better than reading a book and liking it and I m glad you ad that experienceOkay with that beast of a disclaimer over let s get into the reviewThe GoodThe LGBT aspect of the novel Incredibly well done The author imself posted on Des Souris et des hommes eBook: John Steinbeck, Maurice-Edgar Coindreau: Amazon.fr: Amazon Media EUS.à r.l. here sayinge Black Women in White America A Documentary History hoped that someone would one day read this book and seeow normal it is to be gay and I think Leggiamo l'ora. 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Ediz. a colori heas really achieved that I m a straight white girl and I cannot tell you Le guide Ornitho how tired I am of reading books about straight white girls Representation of minority groups in fictionas been so problematic in the past so it s wonderful that now that and readers Je voudrais que quelqu'un m'attende quelque part have access to characters who they can relate to The pacing Stuff was constantlyappening Sometimes it was stuff that confused me but it was stuff nonetheless There weren t any moments where I was bored simply because nothing was Pour l'harmonisation orthographique des dictionnaires happening except for the grape saga on that later The time between events seemed reasonable enough even though sometimes things did seem to be conveniently timed to progress the plot The author knowsow to keep a book moving and this is definitely a skill that will book moving and this is definitely a skill that will Des femmes qui tombent him when writing the rest of this series The font I thought the font used on the chaptereadingscover was delightful It really fit in with the vibe of the whole novel which is a very important aspect of any book for me Those are the main things I liked about the novel The next part you re going to read is under the eading of bad I am uite esitant to use the word bad because to me that comes across as me trashingdragging the book and that is not what I want to do So although I kept the eading of bad for the sake of simplicity I d rather the next few things I talk about be considered areas where there is room to improve Sorry for the plethora of disclaimers in this review Dealing with a book by someone who is really popular on social media can be uite daunting because it can sometimes be met with uite ostile reactions which are never the creator s fault The BadSpelling and Grammar Maybe I m just particularly picky about grammar and spelling but there were a number of mistakes in the Kindle edition that I found Kiss That Frog hard to ignore I m one of those lucky people who find spelling and grammar easy and I ve studied English literature for almost four years Some people aren t as lucky and find itard and that is completely fine However editing and proofreading should get rid of as many of those mistakes as possible and several rounds are needed to really iron out the creases I ll leave a few examples below of things that particularly bugged me so you can see what I m talking about I d kill double the pray Instead of prey curly black The Seneca Scourge hair nestled betweenis pecks I believe the proper spelling is pecs correct me if I m wrong Caleo Leech her adoredip Instead of adorned I promise I won t peak Instead of peek This one came up uite a few times The cover It just wasn t for me Some people love it including the author which is great It just wasn t my thing We ll leave it at that The plot Some things just didn t make sense or were too convenient For example the king invites a bunch of elves to Vibrational Medicine The his castle without giving. 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Cloaked in Shadow (The Dragori, #1)Ot wait to read Found in Night and see where this story is going to go I am The Children Money Can Buy hooked xSasha An Elf nicknamed Zac That s enough to DNR for me right there Let s break down the synopsis now the author puts feedingis family and avoiding a love interest into the same priority category Seriously Wtf is with the cover art It looks like something that would belong to gay fantasy fanfic featuring an Elf that works part time as a go go dancer in a gay club in Orlando And I say that as a gay guy living in Orlando YA can t we demand better than this garbageEDIT Okay gang I need to add a postscript to this review months after I wrote itI know I m getting The Burning Girls hugeate but I m not changing this review At the time it was written I reviewed not the book s contents but what we knew about it The cover art and the synopsis While I wrote a review based on things we knew about an unreleased book others were giving this thing igh starred reviews just because Those same people then attacked me for reviewing a book before it was released Hypocritical much First of all I still ate this fucking cover Seriously this guy got totally swindled with it Critiuing a cover is of course legitimate If you re turned off by a book s synopsis and cover are you or less likely to buy the book Give me a breakSoon after I posted it the author Transgalactic Antics Carrie Hatchett Space Adventurer himself put me on twitter blast and gotis social media acolytes to come and Outmove (Inner Movement, harass me onere Then THE AUTHOR CHANGED HIS OWN SYNOPSIS ON HERE It used to read Zacriah Trovirn is concerned with two things in life feeding The Removed his family and dodging Petrer the boy who brokeis Wildflower An Extraordinary Life and Untimely Death in Africa heartand now readsZacriah Trovirn is concerned with two things in lifeunting and dodging Petrer the boy who broke The Elixir and the Stone hiseartSo this guy attacks me on twitter and gets Ancient Agriculture: From Foraging to Farming (Ancient Technology) his foolish Jonestown clan to go after me then takes some of my criticism WTF Also on this point let s discuss the synopsis uotes on the cover A world in ruin A kingdom of lies Okay so why is that shit not in the main synopsis Instead we re spoon fed this silly over prioritized gay romance meanwhile the world is in ruins In YOUR MAIN SYNOPSIS This whole thing is just a poorly executed messNext let s get rid of the notion that anything about this is original Elves with lightair pointy ears magic and different colored blood is not original It s a straight up Lord of the RingsEragon ripoff The only original thing about it is it s almost exclusively gay characters which is the primary thing being marketed about this book Not the story not the personality of the mains not the conflict the sexuality I ll discuss my issues with this next Taken from the author s own twitter page Black Columbiad: Defining Moments in African American Literature and Culture (Harvard English Studies) here are some blatant rip offs Alorian elvesave golden blood Morthi elves live in underground caverns Mirkwood elves anyone Niraen elves ride elks Again Mirkwood infringement THIS SHIT IS NOT ORIGINAL My final enormous critiue of this book is the marketing and I need to elaborateI love YA I love LGBT fiction I love YA LGBT fiction My top YA favorites is the Six of Crows duology by Leigh Bardugo They feature ueer characters My issue with Ben Alderson is that Black Noir he exploitsis and my sexuality to sell books He knows The Bad Guys his fan girls will go crazy ife shells them some ueer romance He uses gay characters as blatant tropes to market Yce (Captured by Aliens his book Six of Crows isn t a story constructed around gay characters It s LGBT characters constructed inside a story Its seamless and not abused This isow you do ueer in fiction not my trumpeting your work as aving gay characters and oh yeah some other stuff too How YA readers who apparently are offended at anything and everything can tolerate blatant gay exploitation is beyond me Elves shifters and elemental magic oh my Ben s debut gives fans of the Shannara Chronicles something new to fangirl and boy D over in young adult fantasyOkay so I ave to say First Year fans will love this one I sent countless messages to Ben as I was reading saying things like OMG Priscilla s twin Nyah is LIFE Ella fans will love Promise Lords of Action her Your princeling is waaay nicer than mine because Darrenatersthose who love Ian will like Ben s book P Clearly Ben and I like the same stuff because Familiar Stranger A Year Of Loving Dangerously Silhouette Intimate Moments No 1082 his book takes place largely in a castle with aot prince who trains Zac in fighting and who doesn t like fighttraining scenes and duels and then there is the sassy bff and the protagonist who is NOT PERFECT and WORKING ON LEARNING HIS POWERFIGHTING SKILLS Seriously I appreciate a flawed protagonist and Zacriah is that for me But mostly what I enjoyed about this book The way the protagonist s Out of the Shadows homosexuality wasandled Zac already knew Black Gotham he was gay at the starte didn t struggle with anything relating to Addiction hisomosexuality in this book the story just flowed naturally and we could The Adventurer's Handbook Life Lessons from History's Great Explorers have a main character that was openly gay from page one andave it not be a big deal or The Essential Oil Hormone Solution: Reset Your Hormones in 14 Days with the Power of Essential Oils huge plot point just a natural element that went along with the rest of the fantasy storyline Well doneI m not going to drop spoilers or uotes inere because I was reading an ARC and it s not release time yet so I don t want to ruin The Book For The Rest book for the rest you guys but you should definitely check this one out MY BOOK IS OUT IN THE WORLDIM CRYINGThank you to everyone who Madisons War has supported me and Iope you enjoy my book It is out now and I am literally crying into my Iced Latte Thank you all so so so so so so so much IM CRYING again ALL DAY This story means the world to me and I Manual do guerreiro da luz hope a young boy will read this one day and seeow
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being gay is AM WRITING A BOOKTHIS IS MY BABYI am so so excited about this announcement I am aiming to ave "it out early 2018 if not even EARLIER I will ave a better estimate on release date mid 2017 PLEASE COME "out early 2018 if not even EARLIER I will Fallin For His Thug Passion 2 have a better estimate on release date mid 2017 PLEASE COME THIS SOME LOVE ADD IT TO YOUR PAGES AND GET EXCITED Beauty and the Beast inspired fantasy with Dragons well something similar to dragons and OHMYGOSH just you wait and see Gay Romance and Elemental Control ARHHH uoting Ben s not official description Beauty and the Beast inspired fantasy with Dragons Gay Romance and Elemental ControlShut up and take my moneyI m so sold I need this Cloaked in Shadow made me think of Throne of Glass and ACOTAR and a lot of set up books that put things in place before the shitits the fan It felt like setting up a chessboard which makes me so much curious about the seuelI Carrot City hadigh expectations when I started reading it And I can See What You Made Me Do honestly say they were met It was a really nice and enjoyable readI want to point out 2 things though First one the world building It isn t that it lacks in world building actually it was pretty decent but I wouldave liked to know about that world But this is the problem with set up books you can t put everything there especially when the whole novel Java 8 in Action has 350 pages So it wasn t really a problem since I expect the details to be filled in the seuelsAnd there we go to the second thing which I found really interesting Since I knew it was an LGBT story I expected to find aboutow that society thinks about the LGBT community of elves Technically I expected to find a copy of the Weaving a Family Untangling Race and Adoption human world with good and bad stuff But there was no such a thing The main character was just doingis stuff and e was treated in the same way as you d expect in a straight relationship And ow cool is to read about gay relationships just like you read about straight relationships without anyone pointing it out So I Principles of Agricultural Engineering Volume-1 (Farm Power, farm Machinery, Farm Buildings, Post Harvest-Technology) have mixed feeling about the fact that there was no kind of social pressure no kind of what I expected to find Everything was just normal And this is why I gave it 4 stars instead of 3 It was the first book I ve read in which the LGBT part of it is treated in this way and Ionestly think it s so so so cool I want you to look at yourself really look at yourselfAnd I want you to repeat what I sayI am strong I am brave I am fierceAt first it sounded odd like I was trying to convince myself that I was something I wasn t But I carried on and the word began to ebb together into a mantra that vibrated through me The words began to The Special Undercover Delivery (The Little Ad (The Little Ad(option) Agency Book 1) have meaning like they were tricking my mind into trusting them Believing them tbh I came for the gay but stayed for the storyThis was everything The whole time it felt like I was reading an ancient storybook because of the wonderful atmosphere and the breathtaking landscape BEAUTIFUL No wonder it is about elvesAnd this book is about a lot than you would think Oh boy the magic and the mythologyhistory Let me tell you it was smart and interestingI really need to get myand on the next one The game The Black Academic's Guide to Winning Tenure--Without Losing Your Soul has just begun I thought about this meme the whole timeTHE THEME IS A MAZINGAlso my only complaint against it I know it s childish is that there is a LOT of purple and Iate purple with a burning passion lol. Omething much worseThe three elven continents are on the verge of war which Zacriah and is new friends find themselves in the midst. Any reason and they all just go without asking any uestions on the ride there But when they arrive at the palace the king seems sure they must ave uestions The whole duel situation was also confusing I was of the belief that Zac only Northanger Abbey had to enter the duel soe would no longer Longman Academic Writing Series 5 have to work in the kitchens again correct me if I m wrong about this But the King later decides that Zac no longeras to work in the kitchens because The Japanese Pottery Handbook: Revised Edition he saved Hadrian s life Yet the duel is still on So Zac who no longeras to work in the kitchens is duelling so The Columbia Guide to East African Literature in English Since 1945 (The Columbia Guides to Literature Since 1945) he no longeras to work in the kitchens Early on in the book Zac seems worried about showing off Reckoning The Epic Battle Against Sexual Abuse and Harassment his powers but less than a day latere throws The Conditions of Agricultural Growth The Economics of Agrarian Change under Population Pressure himself out of a window in the king s palace which I assume is veryeavily guarded and observed The further into the plot I got the consistent things did get and I could see improvement as I was reading mostly towards the very end of the book Also why elk Have you seen elk Their legsframes don t look like they can support a lot of weight The antlers are also an issue because with any animal you ride on the back of you are at risk of being thrown off Often forwards Being thrown into those antlers does not look like fun to me The whole moons as years thing How does that work Are we following the typical cycles of the moon that we عمارة يعقوبيان have I m assuming so because the author mentions Orion so the skyspace situation seems to be the same as ours But if that s the case is Zac like one and aalf years old Because if it s following our moon cycles that is around Jane Addams how old 18 moons is There were other things about the plot that confused me but I ll leave it at thoseThe writing Some of the descriptions are strange and felt clunky to me A sound is described as soundless A character sands are covered by a lack of something I ll Harry Potter for Nerds have some examples below There were some problems with continuity at times again I ll put examples down below A lot of telling and not showing On one page alone I counted 14 instances of where the character s movements were shown through I include actionere sentences I turnedI tiptoedI steppedI The Mindset of Organization: Take Back Your House One Phase at a Time heard etc The grape saga was a particular issue for me Several paragraphs in two scenes dedicated to grapes when the time couldave better been spent describing the characters or places to get a better image of the world The king s emblem constantly being described as being on things was also not a good point for me Thankfully this ceased after a few chapters There were also a lot of scene breaks where I felt there didn t need to be scene breaks Some examples of issues I ad with the writing I didn t blame their silence Finally realizing the smell was smoke followed shortly by The air was thick with smoke So the smoke filled air didn t smell of smoke Hands rose to blocks eyes Jumping from the wagon with a soundless thud Sound being described as soundless The lack of jewels covering is URBAN ROMANCE hand Covered By A Lack Drips of sweat broke away from myairline to drip down my neck Drips dripped I know whose blood this belongs to The dialogue Dialogue is one of the things I struggle with most as a writer Some people find it easy but I know Open Adoption Experience Complete Guide for Adoptive and Birth Families From Making the Decision Throug howard it can be The dialogue in this book wasn t great Stiff in many places A lot of the On Alchemy humour fell flat for me which I think led to my poor impression of the characters Zac delivers what are supposed to be sick burns at a few points which I just found uncomfortable to read There was also a weird mix of formal old timey language like shall and for and slang that seemed oddly modern and out of place This was jarring for me because it didn t allow for a proper pattern of speech to be established I ll put some examples of that below Clearly bugged from my lack of response Bugged just seems out of place with the rest of the language Leave it to me sweet thing Maybe Zach of Zach and Codyas corrupted this particular expression for me because it stuck out like a sore thumb Everything is just so fucked up Fucked up feels out of place in relation to the rest of the language especially because the word isn t used a lot in the book by characters BITCH Again not used by characters much and therefore seemed out of place The characters I either didn t like or didn t really care about a lot of characters in this book I m going to break it down by a few of the main characters in this book I Civil Rights and the Environment in African American Literature 1895 1941 have opinions about Zac Too much of a special snowflake for me Heas powers no one else Star Wars: The Force Awakens has Heas pierced ears and no one else does He can climb stairs with ease and no one else can Maybe I m just over the whole chosen one thing He also seemed to know things Timo l'Aventurier tome 1 he shouldn tave known There s a good bit of somehow I knew already with Zac That being said I did love Politik Luar Negeri Indonesia Di Tengah Pusaran Politik Domestik how cool Zac is aboutis sexuality and e really did show that being gay is completely normal which is so vital in literature today Hadrian This prince seems to ave a personal vendetta against doors Keeps kicking them down He seems like a relatively nice guy though the dialogue that was supposed to show L'art d'aimer him as kind of snarky and funny fell flat for me so I really didn t think much aboutim He seems like a nice guy and it s clear that Collins French with Paul Noble - Learn French the Natural Way, Part 3 he cares for Zac which is nice Petrer This guy confused me He cheated on Zac yet doesn t seem to know they re not together any I knowe wasn t aware that Zac knew about the cheating but it doesn t take a genius to figure it out I The Folding Star honestlyave no real impression of Petrer other than My Husbands Under Here Somewhere he was a guy who Zac used toave a relationship with The twist at the end with Apiculture et dprdateurs des produits de la ruche him becoming evil was unexpected which is always a good use of character Nyah I don t reallyave much to say about Nyah She seems like a good friend Her and Zac don t spend a phenomenal amount of time together or at least time we get to see Similarly to Hadrian she s supposed to come across as witty and funny but the flatness of the dialogue kept that part of Questions that Islam can't answer - Volume one her from me I did likeow she was a strong woman who was ready and very capable of fighting We seem to get to know a lot of characters only through their relationship to Zac and not as actual individuals All of your characters should Deeds of John and Manuel Comnenus have goals other than interacting with the MC just like everyone in real lifeas conflicting goals Final ThoughtsDid I Comment Devenir Mannequin hate this book No It annoyed me at times but I didn tate it Did I love it Also a firm no To me this reads like a draft than a finished product There are indications that this could actually be well written While I wasn t a fan of ow a lot of things well written While I wasn t a fan of ow a lot of things described ere and there were some lovely descriptions that show a lot of potential I think a lot of the issues I ad with this book could The Zukofsky Era have been ironed out if the release datead been pushed back The amount of time between the first draft being finished to the book being published seemed really short from what I Basic Anatomy and Physiology of the Human Body haveeard Editing takes time and Soins naturels pour les cheveux has the power to work miracles I know the prospect of getting your book out into the world as soon as possible is thrilling What is even thrilling to little old me at least is putting out a well edited book because you know you re selling the best version of your story First word is sometimes not best word However writing a book is a phenomenal achievement and Ben should be incredibly proud ofimself It s something I still Jojo's Bizarre Adventure, Tome 44 : Mon papa n'est pas mon papa haven t managed to do I was actuallyappy to Love Like You've Never Been Hurt Participant's Guide: Hope, Healing and the Power of an Open Heart hear that Ben is writing Heas a lot of potential and so much room for improvement Getting better is never a bad thing Seasoned authors get better with every book they write so I see things only improving from Winning Ways For Your Mathematical Plays Volume 2 Games in Particular here Also I am thankful that this book brought Ben s channel to my attention I follow a few different booktubers andave been aware of Ben for uite a while but for some reason I never thought to look at L'Art au XXe sicle : Tome 1, Les avant-gardes his channel Now Iave and I Kamarja e turpit have seen a few ofis videos which I really enjoyed I will be reading whatever comes next in this series and I am looking forward to seeing Ben improve as a writer If you made it this far good job you This is of an essay than a review I know The English scholar in me doesn t know when to stop I ope anyone reading this found it insightful or even just a good waste of time And as the saying goes that s "all she wrote Disclamer Ben is a good friend of mine but let me tell you this book is OUT "she wrote Disclamer Ben is a good friend of mine but let me tell you this book is OUT THIS WORLD I knew Ben was a good storyteller before e ever wrote Cloaked in Shadow but WOW did this book blow my mind It was as if I completely forgot my best friend was writing this book The story took over my mind and every twist and turn that this book bestowed upon me shook me to the core Plus gay elves WE NEED MORE OF THAT IN YA I loved the romance between Zac Hadrian it was sweet but powerful and left me needing MOREI cann. Tal Elven settlement in Thessolina and forced into King Dalior's new legion of shapeshiftersBut Zacriah is not a shapeshifter He is


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